I really like this. It's simple and unique and eye catching all at the same time xD I don't like poems that are trying to be too 'artistic'. Normally the better ones are the ones that are artistic JUST because they're unique and well thought out and structured. They're far more emotive to read then ones with fancy grammar in them. Just my opinion aha. One question: am I right in saying that the message in this is what homophobia can do to relationships between parents and their children? Is the child upset because she wants her parents to accept her love, whether it be with a boy OR a girl?
Billy